Basic Bases [RESULTS]

Zonkes: 33

Vorik: 33

Ed: 33



Zonkes: Where to even begin. Holy shit. Nomad, you didn't have to build an entire ecosystem. It's a single base. You single-handedly had more information in this one sheet than I saw in the entire contest. The judges literally had to take turns reading it out loud for each other because of the depth and length of the thing. Very creative. Very good concept.  Very very good design. This is the only one that the judges unilaterally agreed was the best base. We genuinely are shocked that you went this far with it. Why do you hate us, Nomad?

Vorik: We ask for a base and you gave us a town. Not just any town that you just copied like Detroit, but a completely original and handcrafted town. Not only did you go to the extreme with what would be considered a base but you went above and beyond when it came to making this made up town feel real. You not only describe the town itself but you describe the daily routine of those that live there, and how it came to be. This has more thought and detail put into it than sthe majority of D&D premade towns I've read by far. I can only imagine the amount of time you put into this. While I do think this is wonderfully done me and the other judges had to take turns reading it aloud because there was just so much detail that it became longwinded and all of us were tired of reading afterwards. I don't think that is a big enough issue to warrant point loss but sometimes less is more. No grammar issues were found except for a single typo in one of the names. Overall this is clearly a work of passion for you and it shows.

Ed: *Cracks knuckles* allow me to start off by asking you, the creator, three simple questions: wtf Dan? wtf Dan? and finally: WTAF DAN? I would be lying if I said this is my favorite, in fact, I think it somehow ranked lower then the entry with the worst Grammar. Why the hell did you build a fucking society Dan? If it wasn't for Vorik's grand idea of us talking about the sheets as we read them I would have just given yours a "meh" at best, now I have to give you a perfect score. On a judge note, your sheet is very well done. You can tell you put so much thought into it that it almost feels like you were creating something for a thread that may or may not come, I almost wanted to be there and see the history of this place with my own eyes. all of this hurts me to type because I really want to score you low because the sheet is rather dull but God damn it you just did so much work with it that I can't bring myself to do it. You broke me Dan and made me look down on my own writing, Just take your points and be happy to yourself.




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Zonkes: 23

Vorik: 23

Ed: 24




Zonkes: So, this one here I liked a lot. But it was also safe. Which is fine, but come on man. I've seen this a hundred times in different media. UA and Xavier's School for Gifted Youngsters come to mind. Not to mention all the super school based RPs. I'm not saying its bad, but you really could've taken some risks here, and that's what put it behind the other applications on this contest. Also the minor grammar errors. I loved the map though. Nice touch.

Vorik: Minor but consistent grammar issues such as using the wrong words (ie import instead of export). While the issues did not affect the reading they were still noticeable. When going over the entry I felt that this was playing it safe using a really stock standard hero school. Nothing wrong with using something that works but thre has been so many hero schools in comics that you need to make it stand out which I dont feel like you did. The only real difference I could see what that the academy still has the abandonded ruins of a previous town. Everything else seems copy and pasted. Would of loved to see you add some of your personality into this. I gave you a 10 in Design because you were very detailed and thourough on describing what exactly is in the base. I honestly couldnt think of any major question or aspect you missed. Some of the details are a bit vague but not enough to be uncertain.

Ed: Right off the bat, I want to say your sheet was by far the one I found the most interesting and I really liked the work you clearly put into it. With that said your sheet has some issues, one of the biggest beings we've seen most of this before, It felt very X-men like with the symbol even being a letter that just so happens to come after X. That aside you do get a small issue with grammar but that is an easy fix. Overall I want to end it with a simple "Good luck and try to aim for this level from this point on because it worked well for you."






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Zonkes: 21

Vorik: 20

Ed: 26




Zonkes: All I can say is that I hope the raccoons next door don't mind their netflix buffering every once in a while since you stole their fiber optics.

Vorik: Almost nothing about this entry made sense to me or the other judges. Like, when we tried reasoning out how a treehouse only half a mile into the woods from their known address hasnt been found by an assassin is baffling. First, there isnt any forrests near Boston for a .5 mile distance, 3 oaks would absolutely not provide a dense canopy, why is there a random optic fiber cable in the woods? I'm going to have to give a 1 in Concept just because the entire reason of the base falls apart as soon as you begin to think about it. That all being said, this was the most entertaining sheet we read. All of us really liked the idea once we got past the part where it doesn't make any sense. The concept might be bad but the creativity of it was wonderful and we had a good chuckle thinking about how 3 heroes decided to build a treehouse in the woods to hide instead of skipping town. Lastly, none of us could find any grammar issues in the entry. Thats honestly impressive and shows that you know how to write. Now all you gotta do is think things through

Ed: This sheet is an interesting one since I both loved and kinda disliked it. On the one hand, it is very faulty with the logic of the building being very unrealistic with the origin story attached it felt like the whole story is just one big "Fuck you and your stupid civilians" to Boston. On the other hand, the idea of a treehouse was very good and the laughs that the other judges and I had while reading your sheet very much saved it from 4th place in my book. In the end, I should probably leave you with a note to tell MVP to stop wrestling and fight Ganja with Wonderkid more and keep up the decent work.



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