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Real Name:Aaron Jacobs
Hero Name: Powergrid
Title: Lord of Lightning
Alignment:Lawful Neutral
Age:31
Gender: Male
Race: Metahuman
Hair: White
Eyes: Blue
Height: 6ft 4 In
Weight:213 Lbs
Blood type:Unknown
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He is a cool headed and rational person. He is not timid but is very soft spoken and likes to keep a profile in public when he isn't fighting crime. Due to his past, he can be prone to outbursts of rage when confronted by certain situations. An example of this came in 2023 when a teenage girl was raped and killed by a gang. Later that same night, all of the gang members were found with lethal burns .He is also known to be a very good strategist and detective
Born in a military base in 1996. Aaron started to display abnormal abilities (e.g bolts of lightning shooting out of his hands) at age 3. Analysis and research reveal that he possesses an extremely rare genetic trait that has appeared allows him to harness the electrical energy found around him and project it on out on external bodies. At first, the military tried to weaponize him and he was trained for such throughout his childhood and his teenage years. During that time, he was subject to physical and mental torture in order to become a mindless weapon of war. Not much details are known about what he went through, but it has been confirmed that he was forced into killing his parents and his older sister during that time period. In December 2015. He escaped the base and stole experimental military equipment. In the scuffle, all known records of his training were destroyed. In April 2016. He appeared as the vigilante known as Powergrid and has used his abilities to fight crime ever since
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1. Agility
2. Reaction
3. Endurance
4. Strength
Electrokinesis:- This power allows him to project electric bolts from his body parts. The bolts are white ish blue in colour and generally emits them from his hands, though he has emitted them from his feet and his eyes in the past.The bolts can reach up to 200 thousand amperes at their maximum strength. The average current emitted is around 80 thousand amperes
He also has shown that he is capable of technology manipulation, being able to mentally instruct anything that runs on electricity to engage and disengage at will when these items are found near him. Due to his particularly rigid training and education, he has shown near genius level intellect on several occasions. A prime example of this is his experimental armor which he has manage to create from stolen military equipment.
1. The source of his power is his brain and that he needs to be focused when he uses them, should he lose focus, he will not be able to control his powers properly and in the worst case scenario he might end up zapping everything and everyone in sight without him being able to stop it in the . A powerful soundwave is a way of distracting him
2. An EMP will cause him to temporarily lose his powers
3. He experiences phantom pains at times and excessive use of his power will damage his body, especially his heart and brain. Thus, it can be concluded that he doesn't have total immunity towards electrical attacks.
1. Experimental Body armor made from the stolen equipment. Has the ability to withstand most conventional weaponry . Enhances his strength and speed to peak human levels and allows extended periods of flight and diving (Cannot travel in space).
The armor, while durable, cannot withstand rocket launcher rounds and other heavy weaponry. Furthermore, the armor cannot work in extremely cold environments and since it is powered by Aaron himself, excessive use of the suit causes him physical pain.
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Aaron currently resides in Malibu, California and owns the "White Pegasus" Nightclub
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Powergrid
"Lord Of Lightning"
Real Name:Aaron Jacobs
Hero Name: Powergrid
Title: Lord of Lightning
Alignment:Lawful Neutral
Age:31
Gender: Male
Race: Metahuman
Hair: White
Eyes: Blue
Height: 6ft 4 In
Weight:213 Lbs
Blood type:Unknown
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The Personality
He is a cool headed and rational person. He is not timid but is very soft spoken and likes to keep a profile in public when he isn't fighting crime. Due to his past, he can be prone to outbursts of rage when confronted by certain situations. An example of this came in 2023 when a teenage girl was raped and killed by a gang. Later that same night, all of the gang members were found with lethal burns .He is also known to be a very good strategist and detective
The Story
Born in a military base in 1996. Aaron started to display abnormal abilities (e.g bolts of lightning shooting out of his hands) at age 3. Analysis and research reveal that he possesses an extremely rare genetic trait that has appeared allows him to harness the electrical energy found around him and project it on out on external bodies. At first, the military tried to weaponize him and he was trained for such throughout his childhood and his teenage years. During that time, he was subject to physical and mental torture in order to become a mindless weapon of war. Not much details are known about what he went through, but it has been confirmed that he was forced into killing his parents and his older sister during that time period. In December 2015. He escaped the base and stole experimental military equipment. In the scuffle, all known records of his training were destroyed. In April 2016. He appeared as the vigilante known as Powergrid and has used his abilities to fight crime ever since
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The Priority
1. Agility
2. Reaction
3. Endurance
4. Strength
The Powers
Electrokinesis:- This power allows him to project electric bolts from his body parts. The bolts are white ish blue in colour and generally emits them from his hands, though he has emitted them from his feet and his eyes in the past.The bolts can reach up to 200 thousand amperes at their maximum strength. The average current emitted is around 80 thousand amperes
He also has shown that he is capable of technology manipulation, being able to mentally instruct anything that runs on electricity to engage and disengage at will when these items are found near him. Due to his particularly rigid training and education, he has shown near genius level intellect on several occasions. A prime example of this is his experimental armor which he has manage to create from stolen military equipment.
The Weaknesses
1. The source of his power is his brain and that he needs to be focused when he uses them, should he lose focus, he will not be able to control his powers properly and in the worst case scenario he might end up zapping everything and everyone in sight without him being able to stop it in the . A powerful soundwave is a way of distracting him
2. An EMP will cause him to temporarily lose his powers
3. He experiences phantom pains at times and excessive use of his power will damage his body, especially his heart and brain. Thus, it can be concluded that he doesn't have total immunity towards electrical attacks.
The Items
1. Experimental Body armor made from the stolen equipment. Has the ability to withstand most conventional weaponry . Enhances his strength and speed to peak human levels and allows extended periods of flight and diving (Cannot travel in space).
The armor, while durable, cannot withstand rocket launcher rounds and other heavy weaponry. Furthermore, the armor cannot work in extremely cold environments and since it is powered by Aaron himself, excessive use of the suit causes him physical pain.
The Minions
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The Fluff
Aaron currently resides in Malibu, California and owns the "White Pegasus" Nightclub
The RP Sample
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Last edited by AT Skylord on March 23rd 2017, 10:38 am; edited 5 times in total (Reason for editing : Had to add some details)
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OK, so let's talk about power grid. As he is right now there is not a whole lot of information and it would be tough for me to say whether or not he is a provable. But I'd like to get him to that point so let's see what needs to be edited.
First of all it's his personality. As is it states that he is cool headed and rational but also prone to rage and that's about it. If that's the case I would really like to know why he is that way. Did something happen to him? Does he have a temper? If so why? There's clearly a lot more to tell about his personality than the three or four descriptive words you've chosen.
Similarly with the history, there's very little information there and I'd like to see what this guys story really is. So far we know he lived on a military base and he escaped with the suit and that's really about it. On top of that you say that he has a gene that shows up in only one 100 quadrillion of a percent of the population which doesn't make a whole lot of sense considering they have only ever been about 110 billion people on earth. So that statistic is bogus I'm sure you came up with it because you thought it was a big number and would make him special and I understand why you would want to do that. But the fact is we had other electrokinetics on the site before so that statistic is way way off. You could just say that he has a rare meta gene and that would solve it, no unnecessarily large numbers needed.
Now to his powers. It looks like he's got the basic electrokinetic abilities but I also can't control electricity in other peoples bodies and has super intelligence. OK so parts of this are fine but it needs to be tweaked. The electro Canisius fine we can live with that, but manipulating the electricity inside another persons body is going to be permission-based, and you'll need to include that in the description of the ability. You're also going to need to write separately that he has super intelligence and describe to what level is that exists. The same goes with his electric kinesis tell us a little bit more about it how does he manipulate energy? What is it look like when he manipulates electricity? How many amps what's the voltage these are all sorts of questions that we would like to see from you so that we have a better idea of what he can do.
Your weaknesses have a similar issue with the powers. Saying one word or a few words like telepathy or strong magnetism doesn't tell us what the weaknesses. For example what happens to him if he's exposed to strong magnets? What about telepathy is he awake to? This extends as well to his if he become stressed he loses control of his powers. What happens if he loses control of his powers? Does he overload and zap everything around him? Does he short out and cause damage to himself? These are things we would like to know, and I have a feeling that in order for the stress weakness to actually apply you're going to need to make it a little less hard to reach. What I mean by that is you say he has to be incredibly overly stressed, which kind of sounds like it's not going to happen often.
Finally we have his suit, which were as I can see gives him about three different powers, or takes the place of three separate powers. Those would be enhanced to durability through the armor, and Hanst physicality through the functions of the suit, and a combination of flight and diving which I can understand we both work in the same parameters. So that means that this suit needs three weaknesses, you need a weakness for specifically related to his flight, or weakness specifically related to his enhanced physicality, and a weakness related to his armor. You already have the on the weakness as it appears that explosive like a rocket launcher penetrate the armor just fine. So only two more will be needed.
I know I've thrown a whole lot at you here but these are the sorts of things we need you to think about as you create and edit your app. If you have any questions please feel free to PM me, to hop on our Discord, or just reply to this app with any questions or suggestions or exclamations that you would like to tell me. I'd be happy to help in anyway. Happy editing!
First of all it's his personality. As is it states that he is cool headed and rational but also prone to rage and that's about it. If that's the case I would really like to know why he is that way. Did something happen to him? Does he have a temper? If so why? There's clearly a lot more to tell about his personality than the three or four descriptive words you've chosen.
Similarly with the history, there's very little information there and I'd like to see what this guys story really is. So far we know he lived on a military base and he escaped with the suit and that's really about it. On top of that you say that he has a gene that shows up in only one 100 quadrillion of a percent of the population which doesn't make a whole lot of sense considering they have only ever been about 110 billion people on earth. So that statistic is bogus I'm sure you came up with it because you thought it was a big number and would make him special and I understand why you would want to do that. But the fact is we had other electrokinetics on the site before so that statistic is way way off. You could just say that he has a rare meta gene and that would solve it, no unnecessarily large numbers needed.
Now to his powers. It looks like he's got the basic electrokinetic abilities but I also can't control electricity in other peoples bodies and has super intelligence. OK so parts of this are fine but it needs to be tweaked. The electro Canisius fine we can live with that, but manipulating the electricity inside another persons body is going to be permission-based, and you'll need to include that in the description of the ability. You're also going to need to write separately that he has super intelligence and describe to what level is that exists. The same goes with his electric kinesis tell us a little bit more about it how does he manipulate energy? What is it look like when he manipulates electricity? How many amps what's the voltage these are all sorts of questions that we would like to see from you so that we have a better idea of what he can do.
Your weaknesses have a similar issue with the powers. Saying one word or a few words like telepathy or strong magnetism doesn't tell us what the weaknesses. For example what happens to him if he's exposed to strong magnets? What about telepathy is he awake to? This extends as well to his if he become stressed he loses control of his powers. What happens if he loses control of his powers? Does he overload and zap everything around him? Does he short out and cause damage to himself? These are things we would like to know, and I have a feeling that in order for the stress weakness to actually apply you're going to need to make it a little less hard to reach. What I mean by that is you say he has to be incredibly overly stressed, which kind of sounds like it's not going to happen often.
Finally we have his suit, which were as I can see gives him about three different powers, or takes the place of three separate powers. Those would be enhanced to durability through the armor, and Hanst physicality through the functions of the suit, and a combination of flight and diving which I can understand we both work in the same parameters. So that means that this suit needs three weaknesses, you need a weakness for specifically related to his flight, or weakness specifically related to his enhanced physicality, and a weakness related to his armor. You already have the on the weakness as it appears that explosive like a rocket launcher penetrate the armor just fine. So only two more will be needed.
I know I've thrown a whole lot at you here but these are the sorts of things we need you to think about as you create and edit your app. If you have any questions please feel free to PM me, to hop on our Discord, or just reply to this app with any questions or suggestions or exclamations that you would like to tell me. I'd be happy to help in anyway. Happy editing!
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Ok. I was trying to make the app into a military report style of thing, so I'm sorry if it was bitvague
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Ok. I was trying to make the app into a military report style of thing, so I'm sorry if it was bitvague
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You can still write the content of the app on whatever style you want so long as that style doesn't interfere with the coding or is evaluating it. And if this is meant to be a military report, wouldn't the military want to know and list everything they possibly can about his abilities? His history? His psyche profile? What they can do against him? That sort of info would be absolutely invaluable to the military if they wanted to have a dossier on him. So yea give as literally as much detail as you can squeeze into this.
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I tried to add as much details as I could, hope it'll be enough
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Skylord do you have any idea how many amps 900,000 is? Even if your average is 100,000, that's a full blown lightening bolt but yours is going to be lasting longer than fractions of fractions of seconds I'm assuming. You'd be creating plasma, potentially initiating nuclear fusion with those sorts of upper limits. Forgive me if this isn't the case, but I get the distinct impression that you're just coming up with big numbers to sound impressive with little care for what those big numbers actually mean. You're better off to just give an example of something that he can do as a "highest level feat" or comparing the electricity he generates to being as lethal as a lightning bolt.
Your weaknesses are going to need to be harsher as well. If telepathy is a weakness of his because of focus I'd include two things in that weakness, that permission is not needed to use telepathy on him and ANYTHING that could break his focus will disrupt his ability to manipulate electricity. You'll also need a third weakness as currently he has three abilities (electrokinesis, electric technopathy, super intelligence). Good ones might include; EMPs disable his abilities, his body is not immune to electrical damage, etc. also please move his armor weaknesses below his armor, not in the weakness section.
Finally, the year in this world is 202X, so either Powergrid is older than you have written or those dates will need to be adjusted. That's really a pretty minor thing but it helps to keep things consistent.
Your weaknesses are going to need to be harsher as well. If telepathy is a weakness of his because of focus I'd include two things in that weakness, that permission is not needed to use telepathy on him and ANYTHING that could break his focus will disrupt his ability to manipulate electricity. You'll also need a third weakness as currently he has three abilities (electrokinesis, electric technopathy, super intelligence). Good ones might include; EMPs disable his abilities, his body is not immune to electrical damage, etc. also please move his armor weaknesses below his armor, not in the weakness section.
Finally, the year in this world is 202X, so either Powergrid is older than you have written or those dates will need to be adjusted. That's really a pretty minor thing but it helps to keep things consistent.
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Is it good now??
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The weaknesses need to be worded more strongly. So instead of "this only happened one time and it's probably not gonna work but sometimes on rare occasions X might weaken him" it needs to be more affirmative. "EMPs will temporarily knock out his powers" is more of how that should be worded. This critique applies to both of his other weaknesses as well.
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I did what I could. I'm unsure about how I wrote the phantom pain part though. Is there any way to further elaborate that weakness??
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