Lilith (to replace artemis as my main)

Real Name: Lilith
Super Hero/Villain/Renegade/etc Name: Vendetta
Title: Harbinger of death, The Void Walker
Alignment: Good (will explain)
Age: 750 years old (looks 24)
Gender: Female
Race: half human, half some thing else i really don't know what to call
Hair: White-blonde
Eyes: Silver
Height:5'5"
Weight: 124 lbs

Costume Description/Image: (See Appearance)

Personality: Earlier in life Lilith was serious but as time went on she learned to be more relaxed. She
believes fun should come first. She does like to play games with others, normally beating around the bush. She also loves to tease people, making them thing one thing but then doing something totally different.

History: 750 years ago Lilith's mother Morgan was poor and homeless. Morgan had ravishing beauty but was a daughter of a murderous count who tried to take over the kingdom, so for her fathers actions she was cast into poverty, never to be able to rise up in the world again. She cursed at humanity and wished to take revenge. She was on her deathbed when the opportunity for revenge appeared in front of her. A sinister looking man in black robes appeared in front of her. "I am death." the man said. "Your time as come but I have heard your cries for revenge and wish to make a deal. Lay with me to night and your life will be prolong for 9 month while you harbor a child. Once the child is born I will take you to your death and raise your child as my own. And when the child is old enough it will exact the revenge on the those you hate. In exchange for your soul." Her mother greedily agreed and the pact was made. 9 months later Lilith was born, and her mother died, being cast into a eternal fire. He raised the child in his realm. Teaching her all she needed to know. At when she was 24 she took the greedy revenge of her mother and then became death's right hand, taking on most of his work load of killing and harboring the dead to the appropriate afterlife. This continued for 500 years before she got tired of the task. The human side of her longed to be with them and protect those who unfortunate get killed by the wicked. She confronted her father about this and he agreed her request to be among the humans. She spent years among them and learned this she didn't learn in the land of the dead. Sadly though her image can be found through time, mostly in a negative light, for she would show up where death was. So was her destiny. Every rarely did she appear where there was no death. She has been saving, and shepherding lives since then among humans in the shadows. Until reticently when she decided to come out of the shadows...

Powers:
- Void Walker: Lilith's trade mark ability. Using her scythe she slices a rip in the dimension, normally to guide spirits into the after life but can also be used to travel for short and long distances. She cause also use it to move friends to other places However using it in battle is very risky cause she could accidentally appear in the wrong place. Also the rip in the dimension stays there until she closes it, meaning anyone could enter it. Continuous uses of the portals and holding the portals open for to long will drain her. she can only go to the land of the dead and the land of the living. Walks in the area between those two worlds to get around

-Medium: Lilith can summon, and communicate with the dead through ritual. To do the ritual She needs ash, rose petals, 4 candles, a slip of parchment paper and her blood. She maybes a large circle of ash then inside of that a circle of rose petals, She sits in the middle of the rose petals with the four candles lit around her. After some chanting. She cuts her thumb and writes the name of the spirit is she summon, which summons the spirit

-Invisibility: Lilith becomes invisible. However animals can sense were she is, like how they can sense any other supernatural force.

-Super strength: self explanatory

-She can sense the good or evil in people she reaps with her scythe

-Able to hide her scythe as a bracelet

Power Grid: (You have 22 points to spend on your Power Grid unless you can fly, in which case you have 20. Each stat can start at 6, not 7. 7 must be earned.)
STR: 4
SPD: 2
END: 5
INT: 4
EP: 5
FS: 2

Character Image/Description:

Spoiler:

Roleplay Sample: Lilith stood in the shadows. Across the street a bank robbery was going on. She could sense the wickedness of the robbers, they've done this a million times before. However she could sense it was not there time and she cursed. Either way they would be stopped. Her scythe showed it's true from and she slice a portal into a different dimension using it to teleport her self into the bank. She stepped out of the portal and they closed behind her. The robbers looked shocked for a moment then raised they're guns at her. One of the robbers fired a shot a her and it grazed her shoulder. Not even wincing at the graze she walked the few feet that spanned between the robbers and herself. She learned over and kissed one, sor ly followed by flipping him over his shoulder and hitting the other with the butt of her scythe. Both of the men laid on the ground, knocked out. With that, she teleported out of the bank, to where she was needed more.

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Cool character, well done. There are a couple of little things. I’d like to see more about her personality.

But apart from that, I have a few questions about her powers.

Firstly, how far can the Void rips go? Can she teleport to somewhere on the other side of the planet? Can she keep them open for a very long time? And what other dimensions can they reached? I’d like that to be a lot clearer and a lot more detailed, just so it removes the possible ability to abuse it.

Secondly, Animals can see you when you’re invisible? What about people who are animals? Can shapeshifters see you? Can people who are trapped in animal bodies see you?

Thirdly, You can summon the dead? Where do they come from? Can you summon anyone who’s dead? Does it take time or can you do it instantly? This could be a problem, especially with characters that might have dead relatives that you could manipulate.

Fourthly, how does she hide the scythe? Does it shrink? I don’t understand that.

And finally, I don’t think you’ll be able to use the “Sense Good and Evil.” It seems a bit too much like a form of Empathy to me, so it’d be better if it was removed or changed.

Other than that, I like her.

in order:

1. She can keep them open as long as she wants but if she has them open they tire her out greatly if open to long. And she can teleport to places on earth, can't go to different planets. Also she can only go to the land of the dead and the land of the living. I should of been more clear but she actually wants on the area between those two worlds to get around. Also she won't be able to travel to a secret base she knows nothing about. She visualized where she is going and that's how she gets there.

2. Yes if someone is in an animal form they can sense her. It's the whole "animals can sense the supernatural." thing. However if the person is seal inside the animal, not by there own doing they can't sense her.

3. when i said summon the dead i didn't mean like zombies, i meant there spirits, this has no offensive trait to it it's mostly for knowledge. sort of like medians can talk to the dead, but she can actually talk to the dead.

4. Magic, the scythe turns into a bracelet when not in use.

5. She is the daughter of death, she was for awhile in charge of shepherding souls to the right after life. She has to be able to tell how is good and how is evil so they would go to the correct afterlife

2 and 4 have been answered pretty well, I think.

1) You’re EP is too small to teleport instantly around the world, especially considering your other powers. 6 EP might just be enough to teleport from city to city, but for 4 EP it is way too little to travel around the planet.

3) I’m a little unhappy with this ability because it could be potentially abused, with secret information of characters being exposed simply and because you might be able to learn about what someone is doing by just going around them.

5) It still seems like a Godmode power to me. If someone is pretending to be good, you’d be able to automatically see through any disguise they have. It’d be much better if you perhaps change the ability instead. Maybe she can sense the good or evil in people she reaps with her scythe? That way, you still have an explanation, and you can’t simply circumvent characters hiding.

edited something and made them more descriptive, also edited power grid

Just give me a little description on Ritual, so I'm totally okay with it, and I think I can approve this app.

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Alright, I'm going to approve this App. Have fun.

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