Healing Heart

going elsewhere aka new character remove this thread
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Hi there Mozy! First off, welcome to the site
If you haven't checked it out already we've got a Discord chat that you can use if you've got any questions for us staff or you just want to hang out with some of the cool people that call this place home.

Anyways, lets get on to what we need to do to get you approved and ready for your first RP here. Unfortunately this is going to involve some work on your part but hopefully we can make this go as smoothly as possible.

So the first main thing I need to point out to you because it affects a lot of what I can see went in to your character creation is that literal biblical angels and demons and the like don't exist in the world of SHRP. There are realms similar to heaven and hell but there is no one heaven or hell, no single creator god or devil. We air on the side of not confirming that any one real world religion is true here. That said we do have lots of characters with angelic and demonic ties, just none that are actual religious figures if that makes sense. SO, you can be an angel. What you cannot be is an actual biblical fallen angel, which is what you have presented here. I understand that this will mean a relatively extensive overhaul on your part for the character, but with the right tweaks it is certainly doable. That said lets move on to some basic app things that will need some work regardless of whether or not you decide to move forward with editing this character or make an entirely new one.

When it comes to appearance of the character, describing them is perfectly fine but we'll need a little bit more detail. Right now I'm not entirely sure what this guy looks like besides a floating mass of eyeballs hair and wings. This is an issue in other aspects of your app as well. If this guys has a storied past lets hear it! Currently I know he was angel and fell (for what reasons? that's got to be an interesting story all on its own!), I know he had some demon buddies and spent some time in two ancient cities. Clearly there is much more to this guy than what you have written here that could be very interesting to see fully fleshed out. He's been around for 13 billions years for crying out loud! If hes that old, use that time. He's got a lot more going on in his life than three vague occurrences.

Your powers have similar issues. Again detail is key and the more I know about what each power does, the better I'll be able to judge whether or not its acceptable. One brief blurb for each is not enough. How do these abilities work? how does he use them? what are their limitations? do they work better or worse under certain conditions? There's all kinds of details that I need to see in order to approve a character that I just don't see here.

Powers 2,5 and 6 will need even more description than that. Five and six are both absolutely player permission based and that will need to be included in their descriptions. Otherwise you would have far too much control over another person's character without them being able to do anythig about it. Number 5 is a summoning power and that means we'll actually need to see a description of the powers and weaknesses (twice as many weaknesses as powers for a summoned creature) in the minion section.

Finally on to weaknesses I actually don't know what most of these do. The first one is banishing. How is that achieved? Can anyone do it? or is it something that requires something specific. What does silver or holy water do when they tough him? What is demonic law and in what way does it interact with him in any way? Then number two and six seem to just be facts about him instead of weaknesses. "He can be beaten" is absolutely not a weakness considering everyone on the site should be able to be beaten. And number six to me seems to just be an angle for his personality. These unfortunately are probably going to require the most work to fix but I'll be more than willing to help you should you decide to fix this up and stick it out

As I said if you have any questions, feel free to PM me or any other staff member, hop on our discord, or post back a reply in this thread. Happy editing!

Just going to gut it.