Karny

Real Name:Jack Dunker
Super Hero/Villain/Renegade/etc Name: Karny
Title: Silver tongue Devil
Alignment: renegade
Age:25
Gender:Male
Race:White
Hair: Black
Eyes:Hazel
Height:5'11
Weight:216 lbs

Costume Description/Image: He wears a Black micheal myers like Jumpsuit with Grease all over it...he carries 2 High Striker Mallets crossed like swords across his back...his Mask is nothing more than a big long scar across his face, on his feet are nothing more than worn out work boots..he wears a utility belt, his utility belt is what makes him really stand out,its filled with Carnival game objects. But these objects have been enhanced exploding Tub Balls, tranqulizing Balloon store darts, and a rubber fish full of Mace

Personality:he Jokes alot...a sucker for the ladies, but when night falls he is all about buisness, which is knocking bad guys heads together, He is a very sarcastic man

History: Jack was born a Mutants son. Neither his dad or mom thought he was also a Mutant they treated him like a pet, nothing but cannon fodder, At the age of 14 he ran off with the carnival, stealing peoples money..talking is way into peoples Wallets.he was a natural, and it was fun, a different woman every night.he started to wonder if he really was a mutant just handed a different set of powers?? Maybe persuasion.As he was unloading the truck for set up, he grabbed the heaviest piece of equipment they owned which was the High Striker tower and just swung it around like it was a twig.he smiled in triumph, he was a Mutant after all, he started going out at night and beating up thugs. He made himself some High strike Mallets with Steel Heads instead of the Rubber ones.he became the travelling hero, Fighting Crime after the Show was down for the night, taking peoples money in the day.he decided he needed more tools after a few close calls, so he started researching bomb making, and other things, and he crafted himself a unique array of toys...

Powers: Super Strength and the power of persuasion ( its not a jedi Mind trick, he can talk people out of almost anything, invluding car keys. Its not so much an offense power as defensive. he uses it to get out of tight fixes to, as in run ins with Cops and a governement officials. Its more a string of lies woven to get what he wants, He doesnt have the power to manipulate minds by persuasion, just belivable lies)

Power Grid: (You have 22 points to spend on your Power Grid unless you can fly, in which case you have 20. Each stat can start at 6, not 7. 7 must be earned.)
STR:6
SPD:3
END:5
INT:5
EP:1
FS:3

Power Grid colours: Purple and Black

Character Image/Description: He stands about 5'11, has Hazel eyes, black hair, a big scar across his face that he got in a Ride Jock vs Gamey scrap at a bar, knuckles scarred up from all the work, muscular,

Roleplay Sample: Karny stands at the top of the ferris Wheel looking down upon the Midway, Nothing was astray tonight, at least not here he thought..he begins to climb down when he sees something out of the corner of his eye, a man in a hood sneaking around by the Zipper.Karny wasnt about to let the man get away with whatever he was planning to do, The man started to descend more rapidly, staying as quiete as he could, as he reaches the last rung an explosion rings out across the midway as the carousel is blown sky high..Karny looks in that direction to see what had caused it, and there stood a man at about 7 ft tall and 300 pounds.looking ugly and mean..he was dressed in a funny looking trench coat, with a red Luchadore mask..Karny drops from the Ferris Wheel and starts bounding towards him..as he collides with the man.t causes a deafening Thud!!!! The man Begins to laugh."you stupid boy..I am completely constructed of steel like material..I was born that way...and I will be victorious this day!!!!" Karny looks at the man with a confused look "And exactly what the Hell are you supposed to be doing that you are certain you will be victorious in?????" His sarcastic Tone upsetting the man a great deal " you Impunent Fool!!!!! I will make this town and all its people my slaves in my factories across seas...you see I run a very successfull buisness, I mass produce Weapons for terrorists around the world, and I make my money by cheap labor, and major Heists...Now prepare to die!!!!!! The man Picks Karny up and Begins to squeeeze.. Jack begins to become light headed.....his breathe now coming in short spurts..he had to find a way..it was life or death...It had finnaly became serious!!!!

Ok then, Firstly, you'll need to make an app for your weapons. Now on to your history, Mutants aren't hunted, its not like X-men, Unless you were hunted by some sort of cult or something so you might want to clarify. Now, your characters actions don't really make him seem very hero like, I mean stealing and pickpocketing is kind of the renegade thing, so you might want to make yourself a renegade, just a suggestion. Another thing is, your "Powers of persuation", Explain what that is in more detail please. Also those "..."'s and "!!!"'s are really annoying, if you could cut back on that it would be appreciated. Finally, i've noticed your sample is in first person, not a huge problem but we generally use third-person here.

Fix those things and we should be good

ok should I make a new topic or just edit it in this one?

Just edit this one

changesmade....at least I think I got all of them

Looks good enough I suppose. Approved until stated otherwise.