WINNERS OF THE JUNE 2019 CHARACTER CREATION CONTEST

Connor Lynch is a mutant from a world where Doctor Necrodium won. His life to this point has been hell, and a struggle for survival.



Chelle: 32

Zonkes: 36

RED: 31



Chelle:  I like the alternate dimension reflecting upon Doctor Necrodium, and how even in your world, he still dies. It would have been even better if he were actually a good guy in your world and he was the one that figured out a way to stop the bad guy: Pain. It would make for a much more telling story that would give your character even more depth and confusion when he comes to a world where Doctor Necrodium was a very bad guy doing worse things just because he felt they were the right things to do. The pale red background made the pale yellow text hard to read. It's appealing over all, but hard to read. So I'm sad to give you such a score in execution. The conept, however, is wonderful. Good work!

Zonkes: Okay, so. I really like this app as well.  Both apps are incredibly well done. The concept on this one is just so good. But if I had to complain, and since I do; the creativity does get a hit because the items and powers are very fallout? Which is fine, but it feels a bit too much like it came directly from a fallout game. And the execution was also slightly off. Either way though, great character.

RED: Right off the bat, I find the background intriguing. I'm usually not a fan of alternate universes -usually due to execution more than concept, admittedly- but this one just works. It allows for a character born of a different world to find his way to this one, and he brings heavy questions with him. I'm interested to see if Connor will resent the world of SHRP, for being the "better outcome" as it were, or if he will embrace it and try to forge a new path for himself.
In out-of-character terms I liked the theme of the sheet visually, the music was a great touch, though I found the contrast of the sheet made it hard to adjust to compared to the dark theme of the site.





Ghost Slot*
200 flat XP

Dan put it best about the character when he said that Commander Higgs  is a soldier out of time, out of space, and out of patience.



Chelle: 33

Zonkes: 33

RED: 25



Chelle: Higgs is a very interesting character, that has clearly been through a lot during his life. His powerset is definitely interesting, but I feel as if you made it a bit long winded and gave us every minute detail. Not entirely a bad thing, per say, but I wish you had given more room for wonder. The app itself was beautiful; a bit hard to read with the way the letters were highlighted that neon yellow, but I got through it. I can say it's definitely interesting to see how a human turned amalgamation coming back to Earth hell bent on dominating it would pose an excellent threat to the site itself. I like the made up serum, the world he came to know as his own, and it's ironic that they're called Higgs' Heroes when, in fact, he's near tyrant like. Haha.

Zonkes: This is an excellent app with a great story and a great concept. Sadly grammar and execution really brough this one down a peg. As muchas I'd love to rate it higher myself, it kind of falls short. Personally I find that the history is all over the place, and the powers are a bit grab baggy.

RED: I can tell that a great deal of thought and effort went into the making of Higgs. The ideas expressed have good potential. However, I found it hard to visualize Higgs in the character sense. His history felt perplexing to read. While definite themes stand out about Higgs -his stubborn resilience, for one- few truly shine through enough to tie everything together. With that thematic absence the character feels lacking, and by the end I found it difficult to understand what motivates Higgs internally.
On a more meta level I found the scale of Higgs' backstory a bit overwhelming. While I appreciate setting integration, I also think that exploring how a foreign character interacts with the site's world makes for intriguing stories. That said, an interstellar conquerer feels like something of an outlier in that regards. Still, I would be interested to see how Higgs reacts once he sets foot on Earth intent on domination, only to realize he's at the back of a fairly long line.



Ghost Slot*
150 flat XP

*A ghost slot is a character slot that you gain temporarily to allow one more character to your roster. Once you choose to retire a character, you lose that slot. You do not gain a permanent character slot.