Freddie Smith

by **morrisonjericho** October 9th 2016, 10:21 am

FREDDIE SMITH
THE FIST

Basic Biography

Real Name: Freddie Smith
Renegade/Hero/Villain Name: The Fist
Title: Hero In training
Alignment: Lawful Good
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Brown
Height: 5' 9
Weight: 180 pounds
Blood type: a positive

The Looks

He is a half Asian, half English young man, who has a pale complexion, and brilliant chestnut brown eyes. He is quite normal looking, not particularly special, just a normal, everyday guy. His costume, is almost as simple as him,it is a blue jumpsuit, with black gloves (This will change) It covers his entire body, and is entirely simple. His black gloves are cast with strong pads on the front, as to support his power, which has many physical reprocutions on his body. His hair is scruffy and messy, and he doesn't seem to care how he looks, it doesn't matter much to him.

The Legacy

Personality: He is a simple, calm guy, he doesn't have many other interests anymore, as sadly, his life has been taken over by his power. He likes to chill with his friends, relax, and spaces out from time to time. He never snaps, he always keeps his cool, and above all, makes sure the atmosphere, is as calming, and soothing as possible, But when he does snap...

History: Freddie was brought into a very ordinary family, none of them had powers, or at least not ones worth mentioning, as a young boy he never got an inkling of any power that he may of possessed. He went to a school with a few people with powers, he had always wished he had grown up to have something like telekinesis or super strength, his family didn't want this, they sent him to a boarding school with many other children. He had to study maths and english day and night, to make his family proud of him.

One day, an ordinary day, nothing special, he was strolling in the corridor, when a boy came up to him, and shoved him into a wall, and started choking him. He couldn't understand why, but the boy had rage in his eyes, Freddie was full of fear, he wasn't a fighter, he didn't want to fight. But he couldn't breath, he felt he had no choice, so he prepared his punch, and with the power of a thousand men, the boy went flying into the next building, killing him stone dead. Freddie looked down at his fists, completely broken and shattered, he was terrified. he didn't know what he did. He was expelled from the school, and his family disowned him. This started his journey to learn to control his power, and use it for a better purpose.

The Powers and Weaknesses

Power(s)

Power 1: He has a massive amount of strength in his body, a MASSIVE amount. He has enough power in his punch to bring a building to his knees.

Power 2: body augmentation: As his super strength can be applied anywhere, he can use it to enpower other parts of his body, like jumping a mile in the air, this has the same problem though

Power 3: Endurance: With his power, he can transfer his energy to his skin, allowing him to defend against massive, lethal attacks, but in similar fashion to his punch, once it's gone, its GONE

Weakness(es)

Weakness 1: By using his super power, he will destroy his body, he can not control his power, so using is (For now) Is a one time thing, he can not repeat it in battle. This means if you can dodge at least two of his attacks, you have an almost 100% success rate.

Weakness 2: Another thing, is that he cannot control the output of his power, it's either 0, or 100, there is no control. This can be used to someones advantage, as he cant control what he destroy's, only where it is directed.

Weakness 3: Defence: Though he may be able to withstand almost ANYTHING for a short period of time, once his defence is worn, it wont come back, and his punches will have to do, leaving a massive opening.
RP Mechanics

Learning: His control and strength will develop over time, allowing him, to control it, but this will be a slow process.

Physical Priority
(You are to put these physical attributes in order from 1 to 4. 1 is the highest priority, 4 is the lowest.)
Strength 1
Endurance 2
Agility 3
Reaction 4

by **Chellizard** October 9th 2016, 8:12 pm

Why'd you type between the tags for bold?

>_> That makes no sense. Fix your app then I'll look at it.

Also read the rules and system book. They're in your PM box.

by **morrisonjericho** October 10th 2016, 2:04 am

Fixed, i think it is, my stuff was broke, sorry xD

by **morrisonjericho** October 10th 2016, 4:14 pm

CHANGED ONCE MORE!

by **Chellizard** October 10th 2016, 4:24 pm

Okie dokie. It seems as though your app is pretty close to completion now that I fixed the coding issues.

On to the nitty gritty.

Need you to develop his history a bit more. It seems cookie cutter, and way too simple.

MorrisonJericho wrote:Power(s)

Power 1: He has a massive amount of strength in his body, a MASSIVE amount. He has enough power in his punch to bring a building to his knees.

Power 2: body augmentation: As his super strength can be applied anywhere, he can use it to enpower other parts of his body, like jumping a mile in the air, this has the same problem though

Weakness(es)

Weakness 1: By using his super power, he will destroy his body, he can not control his power, so using is (For now) Is a one time thing, he can not repeat it in battle

Weakness 2: Another thing, is that he cannot control the output of his power, it's either 0, or 100, there is no control

On to his powers:

I fixed your physical priority to reflect what you would have based on your power set.

You are super strong, and have the ability to channel your strength into specific parts of your body.

With only super strength, you are not durable/tough skinned.

Also, if you did read the System book, you would know that the Priority list needs to be labeled from 1-4, 1 being the highest, 4 being the lowest. So it would be 1, 2, 3, 4 not 1, 1, 4, 4 or even 4,4,4,4 ya know?

It's a tier to show us, that if you were a normal human with no powers, you excel in Strength, but no in Reaction time. If that makes sense.

You can change the order if you see fit, I advise you do so.

Also, had you read the system book, you would note that you can have as many powers as you want, so long as you have a weakness.

A Weakness is anything that is tangible and exploitable either mentally or physically.

Make these changes and we'll see what happens next.

by **morrisonjericho** October 10th 2016, 4:36 pm

Edits made as discussed

by **Chellizard** October 10th 2016, 5:32 pm

Approved and moved.

Welcome to SHRP.

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