Maestro Uidhir - The Wizard of Weathersky Isle

Hi there natty, welcome to the site!

We don't get mage type characters often so I'm always excited to see a new addition. That said, there are a few edits that need done before you can start RPing with this guy.

First of all, how Quinn gets here is a little too similar to how Ash ends up back in time in Army of Darkness. Similar time period, same exact book, same man out of time scenario. Honestly if you changed it from the Necronomicon to something else I'd probably be okay with it so not too big of a deal.

Now on to the powers. We have a pretty simple system here on SHRP for how spell-casting works, for every three specific spells you can cast you need one good weakness. If this is the route you want to go, then you are going to need to come up with a list of every individual spell that Quinn can cast and then determine how many weaknesses he needs for that amount of spells. I know that means significantly more work on your part for creating this app. But it makes sure that we as staff know the full extent of your abilities and can be sure that all of them line up with what is acceptable for a character on the site. The more specialized and specific your spells are, the more likely we are to accept them. As a quick example of how this might work. You could have a fireball spell that shoots from the tip of your staff up to thirty feet in front of you. That would count as one spell, add in a cone of ice and a wind walking spell and they will collectively only need one weakness. Conversely if you decide you want Quinn to have magical control over the element of fire, that will count as an ability and will require its own weakness. Make sense?

If you have any questions please feel free to hop in the cbox or reply to this thread. Happy editing!

Hey there Quinn, I hit your message and I see that you've made some edits here. First off thanks for changing the history. I'm much more comfortable with the Al'Hazrad reference as its been used in multiple, non-Cthulhu mythos stories.

That said we've still got some work to do with your spells.

First of all the "Rift Cutter" is an item not a power. You will need to list it under items, explain to us in detail what it does and include with it an item specific weakness.

There is a similar issue with your spells. While yes you have done them right as far as spell to weakness ratio I need you to do a little more work on them. One sentence is nowhere near enough to tell us what your spells do and currently I'm not even sure if these are spells or abilities. You will need to describe in detail, what each spell does, how it's cast, how long it lasts, how powerful it is, etc. This is all vital information to letting us know what you can do with each ability. By their nature spells need to me more limited than abilities (otherwise they'd get the same number of weaknesses as abilities). So it's common for them to only last for a set period of time and to require the character to do specific things or use up certain items to cast them. The specific of this will be up to you.

Finally your weaknesses are going to need to be actual weaknesses. All three that you have included currently all amount to one limitation stating that this man is not from our time. I wouldn't consider that a weakness against Thor and I don't consider a weakness for Quinn. You will need to come up with a different solid and preferably physical weakness for Quinn for every three spells that you give him. If for some reason you want any of these magical effects of his to be always active, they will be counted as abilities and will need their own specific weaknesses.

I hope this has helped. If you have any questions or hang ups as you move forward with editing your app, please feel free to hop in the cbox or comment on your app!