Roaming

by Guest April 15th 2010, 5:39 am

As Vax traveled down the dusty road of the countryside of Atlanta Georgia to meet Ferrum to get recruted into "F.E.A.R.E". Vax found out that someone from from the "Hand of Justice" was following him for a misson of assination So that "F.E.A.R.E" would no have another villian to be snooping around the streets to rob the banks and to assinate citizens. So Vax takes a quick turn to hide behind a destroyed tralier to wait for the hero to come around the corner so that Vax can make his move. Then seconds later Vax takes his chances and lunges at the hero and thros him into the tralier and then goes up to the hero and picks him up by his throut and asks "Who sent you" and then the hero gasped for air and then said "Ember Fangs". Then Vax droped the hero and turned and saw the building were Ferrum was and burst into the building and said to Ferrum that the "Hand of Justice" sent someone to assinate him but he had just fought this person and beatin him to were he was gasping for air then burst into thin building. Now Vax is finally in "F.E.A.R.E".

by **The_soapmaker** April 15th 2010, 6:33 am

((Uhm, dude, why is there no application for your char? I'm sorry, but posting without an approved app is not something that I am extremely fond of. Oh, and by the way, could you take more time to reread your post before you actually post it, in order to check for any mistakes. Mistakes such as "Assinate" (Assasinate), "Droped" (Dropped), "thros" (Throws), "throut" (Throat), "beatin" (beaten), "thin" (this), "misson" (mission) and probably "lunges" (but I don't know what word you mean by that). And please, I'm nearly begging you, stop making sentences that go like "So Vax did ... and .... and... and.... and... and... and....". Start using periods. Periods are good. Periods have a reason. Periods have a point. In fact, periods are points. Anyway...
In short: Make an application for your character, try to reread what you just wrote and make sure it's comprihensible for the common forum-dweller. That way, you will improve the pleasure with which other people read your posts, and therefore, are more able to respond properly. Capice?))